Don’t start your query letter with the name of your character. Lucy Links is on the rebound! Martine Kessell grew up in Capetown. Carl Noop never thought he was meant for great things.
Why? Why does it always sound…silly? Or cartoonish? Is this just me?
Nora Elle Martin is heading home for her high school reunion! Arthur Horowitz walks 2.2 miles every day on the tread mill in the hopes of seeing Binny Abromowitz. Abigail Stone, when left to her own devices, thought about shards.
I think it has to do with the fact that the character doesn’t exist. THere is no context. You’ve gone off the deep end before knowing if the pool was filled. Is this making any sense? I get query letters like this every day and and they make me groan.
Ronnie Melt couldn’t stop thinking about the time she and Pablo Anger made out in the back of her father’s Jaguar. Farnia Parnassus always dreamed of flying. The first time Ricky Pert went to rehab would not be the last.
You can start a novel with your protagonist’s name, but I counsel against it int he query letter. But I’m just one literary agent.
Come on, give us a really bad sentence.
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